Mili Dueli 2023 – Kosovo (Poetry and literary criticism)

Organizator — Tue, 27 Jun 2023 12:36:28 +0000

RESULTS

LITERARY CRITICISM OF JURY MEMBERS

Književna kritika (komentar) žirija na pročitane pjesme:

Nermin Delić: AJNE IBERHYSAJ – Drago mi je vidjeti ovu autoricu ponovo sa nama. Budući da je Najbolji plasman Kosova u prošloj sezoni, očekujem visoki rezultat i sada. Glavna sugestija je odustvo originalnih metafora. Na tome je potrebno poraditi, jer sve drugo ova autorica posjeduje.

FLAMUR FONIQI – Bilo mi je zadovoljstvo prevoditi ovu pjesmu. Odlična tematika.

SAHIT KADIĆ – Odlična pjesma! Naročite pohvale za tematiku i upotrebu originalnih metafora.

Gramatička greška: osmjehu – osmijehu.

AGIM DESKU – Jedina zamjerka je što je pjesma više prozaična nego poetična. Volio bih da je lišena suvišnih riječi i da je uneseno u nju više originalnih metafora. Na taj način bi bila spašena hermetičnosti u koju sada zazire.

SAFET ĆEMAN – Pjesma sa prelijepom porukom. Isuviše je jedonstavno pisana da bi oborila s nogu, a opet, prelijepo poentirana da bi ostavila čitaoce ravnodušnima.

Mislim da bi trebalo izvršiti konverziju riječi kako bi rečenica izgledala smislenije:

„I ona je veliki jedan znak pitanja“ – „I ona je jedan veliki znak pitanja“

„Dal’ čovjek stvarno zauvijek umire“ – „Da l’ čovjek stvarno zauvijek umire“

AG APOLLONI – Odlična minijatura. Volio bih da je više originalnih metafora upotrebljeno. Stil je savršen. Djeluje da se radi o zanimljivom autoru.

XHEVAT PREBREZA – Vrlo interesantna ljubavna pjesma. Sviđa mi se stil.

TYRAN SPAHIU – Odlična pjesma. Autor je sam radio prevod ili se radi o originalnom verziji pjesme gdje su uočene brojne gramatičke, ali mnogo više informatičke nepravilnosti. Obavezno poraditi na tome, jer kvari utisak ove originalne pjesme. Posljednji stih mi je pomalo nepotreban, jer objašnjava prethodno rečeno.

…………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………….AJNAJNE IBERHYSAJ – I am glad to see this author with us again. Since the best ranking of Kosovo she was in the last season, I expect a high result now as well. The main suggestion is the missing of original metaphors. It is necessary to work on that, because this author has everything else.

FLAMUR FONIQI – It was a pleasure to translate this poem. Excellent topic.

SAHIT KADIĆ – Great poem! Order praise for the subject matter and use of original metaphors.

Grammatical error: osmjehu – osmijehu.

AGIM DESKU – The only complaint is that the poem is more prosaic than poetic. I wish it was stripped of unnecessary words and that more original metaphors were introduced into it. In this way, it would be saved from the hermeticity it is now shying away from.

SAFET ĆEMAN – A poem with a beautiful message. It’s too simply written to knock you off your feet, yet beautifully punctuated to leave readers indifferent.

I think a word conversion should be done to make the sentence look more meaningful: (see original comment)

AG APOLLONI – Excellent miniature. I wish more original metaphors were used. The style is perfect. It seems to be an interesting author.

XHEVAT PREBREZA – A very interesting love poem. I like the style.

TYRAN SPAHIU – Great poem. The author did the translation himself, or is it the original version of the poem where numerous grammatical, but much more informational, irregularities were observed. Must work on that, because it spoils the impression of this original poem. The last verse is a bit unnecessary to me, because it explains what was said before.

Sarah Isufi: AJNE IBERHYSAJ: Through contrasts, this poem expresses a sense of longing, with a simple, yet effective language.

Good luck to you, Ajne!

FLAMUR FONIQI: This poem is a moving exploration of loneliness, alienation, and the human need for connection. The last strophe is particularly poignant, with explicit, but thrilling verses.

You’re on a good path, Flamur, keep it going!

SAHIT KADIĆ: Sahit, I understand a poet’s vital need for similes, but sometimes trying to attach the same meaning to many different elements is not the best choice. Here you use “orchid, wild pomegranate, fig tree, chestnut” within few verses, which spoils the emotion due to distraction. The poem has potential, otherwise.

Good luck!

AGIM DESKU: “Ajkuna, Titanic, Shakespeare, Otranto, Hamlet”, I just cannot read your poem to the end, Agim. I feel like I am repeating myself, but once again, FOR ALL THE AUTHORS: PLEASE, KEEP THE ELEMENTS VIVID, BUT NOT MESSY!

SAFET ĆEMAN:Lukewarm!

AG APOLLONI: Nice capture of metaphors, Ag. Good luck!

XHEVAT PREBREZA: Lukewarm!

TYRAN SPAHIU: Good topic!

Ljubica Petrović Kosor: Neću komentarisati pjesme pojedinačno. Samo ću reći: Bravo, Kosovo! Čestitam! Ove sezone ste me oduševili. To je razlog ovako visokih ocjena.

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I will not comment on the poems individually. I’ll just say: Well done, Kosovo! Congratulations! You have blown me away this season. That is the reason for such high ratings.

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Mili Dueli 2023 – Kosovo (Poetry and literary criticism)

RESULTS

LITERARY CRITICISM OF JURY MEMBERS

POETRY